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    dots Submission Name: movementdots
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    Author: Briannan
    ASL Info:    20/F/CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.59 - 123/127/49
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 622
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    Description:
       Pretty much a free write. I wrote what popped into my head. It became a kind of rhythm. The words seemed to progress and create a kind of strange contradictory poetry. Some of the lines go one onto the next. Others seem as remote from one as a bird and a frog. I think it is beautiful and sounds like a city. It creates a sound with a strange kind of picture story to it. I think it is beautiful


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    dotsmovementdots
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    One step
    Two step
    Three step
    Back
    Again and again
    Four step
    Five step
    Six step
    Stop
    Wait
    Go
    Ahead
    Behind
    Forward
    Backward
    Go
    Wait no
    Stop
    Hurry
    No running in the halls
    You will be late
    You are always late
    She will be loved
    Hurt
    No pain
    Tears of joy
    Tears of anger
    Tears of pain
    One step
    And on it goes
    Again and Again
    Never to rise
    Not nearly as fun
    You
    What do you think you are doing?
    Fat
    Ugly
    Pretty
    Sweet
    Hunger is a demon
    One step
    Two step
    Always going
    Never stopping
    Go
    On
    Forever




    Submitted on 2007-02-22 12:56:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Like you sorta said, very busy. I definitely feel the isolation of the subject. School can get pretty lonely. I love how the momentum of the poem is halted at various points.
    I remember first starting to believe in my free thought poetry abilities. It can be a beautiful thing, hun. Keep working at it. I like where your writing is headed.
    | Posted on 2007-02-23 00:00:00 | by Jbills | [ Reply to This ]


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