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    dots Submission Name: Disasterdots

    Author: Jbills
    ASL Info:    30/m/IL
    Elite Ratio:    3.52 - 57/68/29
    Words: 75
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Sleepwalk through life
    Lucidly living
    Open eyes only at night
    Gruesomely giving

    What would you do if your dreams got flooded?
    If your dam didnít hold, what would you do?

    Drowning isnít an option
    Too much I want
    Too much I have

    Persevere, my dear
    Good fighters take punches to give punches
    See the lies through swollen eyes

    Hearts beat faster
    Pain forgets laughter
    When your bond takes on disaster

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      this is pritty good. I wanted to thank you for commenting on my writting "love decives" . So thankyou for the advise. I realy do apreshiate (sorry thats spelled wrong) the comments and advise If you like that I have more actual poetry up there you should read.. That was just one of the papers that I write when I am in a bad mood and am haveing a little trouble putting in to poetry form....

    (sorry if this spelling/typing is a little messed up I type this in class and have to hide this screen and I cant see what I am writting..) :)
    | Posted on 2007-02-23 00:00:00 | by allmine | [ Reply to This ]

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