I like it. Some flow issues, as people always say about my stuff. But yeah, I really like the idea and it is hard hitting. In the begginning it seemed kind of forced in the first stanza but then it turned into a sort of...I dont want to say forced...but tough. Like every stanza is like a thud in your mind. You read it and its like a brick falling down, but it continues throughout the poem as a sort of structure. So yeah...in conclusion I really liked it, it all worked out quite well.