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    dots Submission Name: My Roomdots
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    Author: angel_lou
    ASL Info:    19/m/uk
    Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 4/6/7
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 661
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsMy Roomdots
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    I feel my heart pounding,
    as you approach my house.
    You say you can't remember,
    What my room looks like.
    I would take you up and show you,
    But I've been too much hurt before.
    I'd just freeze with your hand in mine,
    Starring at the door.

    I'll take you inside if you promise,
    You'll be with me again.
    Through up and down,
    Thick and thin you know what they say.

    So how about it mummy,
    If not will u do it for him.
    Give him a real family,
    like we were so used to.

    I know you cannot love me,
    'Cos you don't know who I am.
    But give me time and you'll see,
    I'm your perfect man!!!




    Submitted on 2007-02-23 05:15:13     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Tragic.... I know how it feels to love someone so much to actually think about letting them hurt you just to be with them. Really good write, man.
    | Posted on 2007-02-23 00:00:00 | by ashlee_jane2003 | [ Reply to This ]
      i feelthat this is to your wife or your ex wife, there was sumething tragic happen that she has lost her memory; all we can do is to try our best and live for the futher and try to forget the past, the past can bring back so much hurt to us and the ones we love. Bones
    | Posted on 2007-02-23 00:00:00 | by Bones | [ Reply to This ]
      the mummy reference is to the mother of my kid before anyone gets any bad ideas!!!
    | Posted on 2007-02-23 00:00:00 | by angel_lou | [ Reply to This ]


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