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    dots Submission Name: Thesis: The Adamic Effectdots

    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 155
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsThesis: The Adamic Effectdots

    Wading in the water,
    In the flood I've caused,
    Where pain plays,
    But i can never press pause,
    I can flip the channels(on the screen),
    Surely, they'd understand,
    But they can't heal my pain,
    They're helpless at my hand,
    I can rewind the tape,
    But I just stare in disbelief,
    And stand out in the rain,
    Just to hide my grief,
    So you couldn't see the tears,
    I'd bottle up inside,
    And then wait till i was alone,
    So it's okay to cry,
    So I'm okay, alrght?!
    If anyone asks that,
    I watch it all again,
    Readit in a flashback,
    So in this house,
    With water ripped panels,
    I sit here waiting and raining,
    Flipping through channels,
    Wading in the water,
    In the flood I've caused,
    Where pain plays,
    But i can never press pause,
    I watch The Adamic Effect,
    It's left us in pieces,
    This is my Guilt Offering,
    As well as my thesis...

    Submitted on 2007-02-23 09:35:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    | Posted on 2007-10-09 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]

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