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    dots Submission Name: The Pactdots
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    Author: Non-Sens-Uality
    Elite Ratio:    2.94 - 67/80/53
    Words: 121
    Class/Type: Poetry/Gothic
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       ...all your sanity and wits... they will all vanish... I promise... it's just a matter of time...


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    dotsThe Pactdots
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    Seeking answers through cold eyes,
    Enchanting forms reflecting...
    Lost in pictures and in lies -
    Lucidity is just "affecting"...

    My angel, is one in disguise,
    Eternal hell's expecting -

    You, to become one of the spies,
    Out of time and space, detecting,
    Untold thoughts, in crimson skies.
    Redemption, my heart is rejecting -

    Sweet sin, silver stylize -
    One story of "act and reacting",
    Unaware - you'll fall, then rise,
    Lost translations, meanings flexing.

    Velocity of time which dies -
    Eternity - moments collapsing...
    Reading the pact would be unwise -
    Sign, dear, with the everlasting
    Universe of lightblue ice -
    She's everything, but not ... a blessing.




    Submitted on 2007-02-23 18:59:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Tip toeing through your lines is like snowboarding down a voltage :) . A shrouded mind is such a world of possibilities that it takes a true illusionist to fit it into words. The abstraction and the distorted chaotic imagery
    can be a very powerful poetic tool indeed. The rhyming style you used is quite dynamic and I'd say that you guessed it right on what this piece needs to spurt into harmony. Hmm...chaos and harmony...intriguing!
    | Posted on 2007-03-05 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      You make sin attractive without concealing its deadly side. quite an accomplishment.
    My favourite lines are:
    Eternity - moments collapsing...
    Reading the pact would be unwise
    ...........................a blessing.

    I hope my sanity will stay with me.... or its loss is inevitable.
    Cool writing style, I must say.
    -parul.

    | Posted on 2007-02-25 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]


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