I agree this piece came across as simple, but I'm going to have to disagree with Snakebite7, in this case, it wasn't befitting. It feels like no point was really made in the piece, just descriptive words which overshadowed any emotion.
A pretty simple piece, but there is absoultly nothing wrong with that fact. Just means it's easier to read and gets the point across a little quicker.
I suppose the only real issue I do have is the fact that the first two stanzas have 5 lines, whereinas the last only has four. It was probably your intention to do this, but it makes the reading and stuff a tad bit akward.
Besides this, a simple, yet thoughtful piece. Inner strength and all that, if I'm lookin at this correctly.
Good work.
Snake
Submission Name: Still
