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    dots Submission Name: The Sun Also Setsdots
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    Author: SnakeBite7
    ASL Info:    17/M/NJ
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 87/132/57
    Words: 414
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Serious
    Total Views: 100
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 2501



    Description:
       Another song, this one I prefer to the last submission. More work went into this one, and it's more varied, even though it has the same basic structure and repeating chorus. Lemme know what you think.


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    dotsThe Sun Also Setsdots
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    Maybe someday I’ll realize what it all means
    Maybe that day will be tommorow.
    Then again, it could have been yesterday
    A spot of solace in the sorrow.

    I gave it a day or two
    And then I shut down and went to bed
    Hope things improve when I wake up
    But it’ll probably be this all over again.

    Everyday I feel like crying.
    And sometimes, even dying.
    But I keep on going, never ever slowing
    And it’s just too much to bear.
    It’s pretty tough to live when nobody’s there.

    If I could I’d lie on the train tracks
    Swim across the ocean and never look back
    Jump off of this roof and dive through the earth
    Travel through the desert and faint from the thirst
    Pour the gasoline and light the flame
    Maybe even overdose on crystal methane
    Swallow any poison and take any pill
    But when it comes to life, I just have too much will.

    Going day to day living my life
    Putting on the act like nothings wrong
    It’s a little number we all know
    But try not to live it too long

    Because eventually it reaches a point
    Where the lie becomes the reality
    And I promise myself only a little while longer
    But it’s so much farther than I want it to be.

    Everyday I feel like crying.
    And sometimes, even dying.
    But I keep on going, never ever slowing
    And it’s just too much to bear.
    It’s pretty tough to live when nobody’s there.

    If I could I’d lie on the train tracks
    Swim across the ocean and never look back
    Jump off of this roof and dive through the earth
    Travel through the desert and faint from the thirst
    Pour the gasoline and light the flame
    Maybe even overdose on crystal methane
    Swallow any poison and take any pill
    But when it comes to life, I just have too much will.

    I watch the sun fall, and wish I could too.
    But I just continue to rise.

    If I could I’d lie on the train tracks
    Swim across the ocean and never look back
    Jump off of this roof and dive through the earth
    Travel through the desert and faint from the thirst
    Pour the gasoline and light the flame
    Maybe even overdose on crystal methane
    Swallow any poison and take any pill
    But when it comes to life, I just have too much will.




    Submitted on 2007-02-23 19:57:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I think this is amazing. If you don't mind I'd like to actually post it on some other web sites. I'll put your name on it but I really love this. Get back to me on that.


    Sita
    | Posted on 2007-03-15 00:00:00 | by SitaSinclaire | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm no song expert, but I liked it a lot. Maybe mostly because it's how I feel right now, exactly. Like it's almost too much to slog through, but not quite. Somehow I make it, and I resent that. I wish I could just give up. But I hang on, telling myself it'll get better, and does it? Don't know. I'm still waiting for the next day.

    I especially love the chorus:

    If I could I’d lie on the train tracks
    Swim across the ocean and never look back
    Jump off of this roof and dive through the earth
    Travel through the desert and faint from the thirst
    Pour the gasoline and light the flame
    Maybe even overdose on some crystal methane
    Swallow any poison and take any pill
    But when it comes to life, I just have too much will.

    So much imagery. Like one mind explosion after another :)
    It's great.
    | Posted on 2007-02-24 00:00:00 | by Dandelion13 | [ Reply to This ]



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