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    dots Submission Name: he and reation to hedots

    Author: slickone113
    Elite Ratio:    3.05 - 37/46/20
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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       poem my wife vanessa bryan wrote and i responded

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    dotshe and reation to hedots

    she paces, aimlessley... in need and without the slightest idea.
    pondering the meanings of many things,
    anything to keep from not existing.
    her mind a battlefield without sight of amnesty...
    he is her shelter from oblivion,
    momentary ectacy,
    his very prescence humbling and comforting....
    He gives her peace with no expectation,
    he is her liberation
    2007 Vanessa Bryan

    he paces aimlessley in and out of reactions, clouded
    rooms with creaky floors....
    years without need of another and now........?
    happily swimming in a magnetic pull and lost
    without.(not existing)
    or what really is?
    i am!! i am honest in her shelter
    she watches me cry in the corner and lets me die
    i am reborn in life a new person,
    she calls me a man and i am a alive
    finally! so curse the ones who watch without smiles
    and let me hold her in my skin with no expectation,
    she is his liberation.

    2007 Josh Polizzi

    Submitted on 2007-02-24 13:21:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      That's powerful and romantic. I really liked it.

    'she watches me cry in the corner and lets me die
    i am reborn in life a new person'

    those are my favorite lines. You and your wife are both excellent poets. Great job
    | Posted on 2007-02-24 00:00:00 | by JAcksonJr | [ Reply to This ]

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