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    dots Submission Name: Go ahead, Take what dose not Belong to YOU!dots

    Author: jackz
    ASL Info:    24/F/OH
    Elite Ratio:    3.76 - 591/622/380
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsGo ahead, Take what dose not Belong to YOU!dots

    Take this from me
    Why don't you?

    Take what does not belong to you!
    You have for so many years...

    Why have you not taken this?
    The only thing going good in my life

    You seem to have great timing
    When it comes to things like this..

    Thinking "maybe it'll be different this time"
    Giving me false hope..

    And right when these walls retract...
    And I begin to show emotion

    You come in for the kill!
    Taking what I have grown use to..
    Taking all I long for

    Now I awake in the morning with a blank mind
    I sleep without those dreams..

    You've taken the only thing that made me smile..
    You've taken my world and turned it upside down!

    Submitted on 2007-02-24 14:13:48     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hmm this is interesting. I get from this that he raped or not exactly raped but had sex with you which you didnt exactly want. Sorry but that is what i am getting correct me if i am wrong.

    | Posted on 2007-03-12 00:00:00 | by Flowerinbloom | [ Reply to This ]
      Your writing is very unique.. even on upsetting subjects it comes of joyous somehow. i don't know why lol. one thing i'm not sure about is why you mispelled 'does' as 'dose' you insinuating a dose as in pills or medical doses?
    | Posted on 2007-02-24 00:00:00 | by JAcksonJr | [ Reply to This ]

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