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    dots Submission Name: I AM dots
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    Author: Kay
    ASL Info:    15/f/
    Elite Ratio:    3.72 - 216/197/68
    Words: 198
    Class/Type: Rant/
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       my big big big brother. yeah he's always telling me i'm naive. i'm spoiled. i'm stupid. all kinds of put downs. i never pay antention to him. he thinks just because he studied phsycology and worked with juvies. he thinks i'm like them. and then aother people at school are like; well.. they tell me nice compliments. and it gets annoying. w/e. i just decided to write about it. since i write about everything else.


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    dotsI AM dots
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    .i am happy.
    .glad.
    .blessed.
    .a teen.
    .
    .i am naive.
    .a bitch.
    .only a kid.
    .an ending.
    .
    .i'm shy.
    .quiet.
    .sweet.
    .oh so nice.
    .
    .i'm mean.
    .a bully.
    .rude.
    .a lovely tragedy.
    .
    .i'm a smile.
    .a tear.
    .a laughter.
    .Hostile.
    .
    .i'm stupid.
    .nothing special.
    .spoiled brat.
    .only a kid.
    .
    .i'm a tease.
    .a color.
    .dead rose.
    .w/o a stem & leaves.
    .
    .i'm a shame.
    .ignorant.
    .a lie and truth.
    .the drops in rain.
    .
    .i'm all this. even more.
    .Its what you call me. its what they say.
    .so i'll go along. and say it too.
    .
    .i'm a stupid bitch who is a spoiled, naive, brat. a little girl... so ignorant and not ashamed. i'm all the bad words you can think of.
    .
    .
    and inside of me. i'm laughing out loud. at you. because u can say to me that i'm full of shit.
    .
    I just never gave a fuck.
    .
    because i am who i say i am. I'm not looking for me. i'm creating me. and all those names you call me. are words that describe you perfectly the same as me.




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      Although a big part of this seems serious, I just want to compliment. I like the way that every other section is pos/neg. The best part is that the ending makes up for it all.

    "and all those names you call me. are words that describe you perfectly the same as me."

    I don't have many of my poems on the site like a lot of other people do, but I like making things my way and not going with the flow just to make everyone else happy. That's what I like about this. Kudos ;)
    | Posted on 2007-02-24 00:00:00 | by ccbbyblue | [ Reply to This ]


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