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    dots Submission Name: German Princessdots
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    Author: Jessica Lynn
    ASL Info:    22/f/mn
    Elite Ratio:    2.86 - 121/119/57
    Words: 186
    Class/Type: Rant/Angry
    Total Views: 1261
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1141



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       Is it just me, or does ever single man on the planet have a thing for blue-eyed blondes. My boyfriend does, and this is dedicated to him.


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    dotsGerman Princessdots
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    Im breaking down.
    I can'tdo this any more.
    I can't feel this anymore.
    I can't be this anymore.
    What did you want?
    Who do you want me to be?
    Blue eyed beauty?
    My eyes are brown.
    But now red from tears.
    Golden hair, only from the dye.
    Its not real, and I don't want to be her.
    Not Rachel, Paige, not Brittnae, or Ellie.
    I am not them, but you can't see.
    Dark hair, dark eyes.
    Can't you love me for me?
    Birthstone, red.
    You hate the color of blood.
    So jewelry sits in my box.
    For show, like a model.
    Not me.
    I can't stand this.
    I can't do this!
    I am not them.
    Tried to break me, change me.
    Im too tall, too dark.
    NOt a german princess.
    What do you want from me.
    Why am I not beautiful to you!
    Why does the world not see nature can be pretty too?
    I am not like them.
    I can't pretend,
    I have to be me.
    I am not for show.
    I am not a german princess.





    Submitted on 2007-02-24 19:27:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      you are pretty...
    dont listen to what he says.
    i agree with kay on the qoute that "we are all beautiful. its what we do that makes eveything ugly".
    i know a pretty girl who acted [censored] and stuff, over time she dont look so pretty to me and the people around anymore
    | Posted on 2007-04-05 00:00:00 | by rubymoon | [ Reply to This ]
      i love it. its so true. i rele don't know what else to say, but i can relate, perhaps not to the extent that you've experienced how that feels, but i can relate and i rele love the poem.

    ps. i hope u dumped that dick by the way...

    jessibel
    | Posted on 2007-03-02 00:00:00 | by Jessibel | [ Reply to This ]
      Newsflash. You're pretty.
    And your boyfriend/ex/whoever the [censored] you're talking about is one of those pieces of [censored] who probably shouldn't be dating.

    Sorry if that has NOTHING to do with this poem. But I needed to say it. Even if it's been said, even if you don't want to believe me.
    | Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this poem. I can definitely see where you're coming from, too. It's kind of sad to see objects of desire are tan-skinned and white-haired. They're gross. Individuality is far more important than trying to fit in and be the stereotypical object of desire.
    Great poem :)
    | Posted on 2007-02-25 00:00:00 | by Nihilum | [ Reply to This ]
      Damn jessica u should know every guy isn't like dat....but damn if he can't like u for who u r [censored] him..
    it's his lost.... i see this as a rant more than a poem... i think u intened to be a poem but the flow of the piece was choppy though out..... but on flip side ive been on this site for i think almost 2 1/2 years and i haven't read one dat was repin da brown hair girls and putting down the dumb blonds..
    well hope to hear from ya keep writing
    get back at u r boy

    Max
    Aka
    Lil'Mix
    | Posted on 2007-02-25 00:00:00 | by theman | [ Reply to This ]
      I liked it, it had some flow issues, but it was made up for in emotion that didn't feel overblown or forced, geniune and sincere, good. I can sadly confess that I have a thing for blondes. However, I don't really have a preference, rather I just tend to find blondes hot more often . Is it really my fault Scarlett Johanson and Gwenyth Paltrow are so hot? :-p. Christina Ricci and Angelina Jolie are as well, on the other hand. Anyways, I'm not gonna just give comments with random advice, but I'd be happy to talk if you ever wanna send me a message.
    | Posted on 2007-02-24 00:00:00 | by Ygi | [ Reply to This ]
      wow.. i know exactly what you mean. I grew up people thinking i was white mixed with something. My family always told me "brown is a beautiful color"
    so i never died my hair. my hair is still in its natural color. My eyes are dark brown in the night but light brown in the day.

    Brown is beautiful. and if your boyfriend is trying to make you into something you don't want to be. than thats not right. Some one out there will love you for who you are. and not becuase he will secretly wish you were blue-eyed with blonde.

    "we are all beautiful. its what we do that makes eveything ugly"-unknown

    and Nature.. omg. i love it so much. i wish my art would look like it. I think Nature is way better than Mona-Lisa or any other great painting.

    nice poem. i liked it allot. and i can relate to it.

    kay
    | Posted on 2007-02-24 00:00:00 | by Kay | [ Reply to This ]


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