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    dots Submission Name: Jamesdots

    Author: Thinkingofyou
    ASL Info:    18/f/The sunny state
    Elite Ratio:    2.83 - 283/423/132
    Words: 164
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
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       I called it James because I simply want to kill him, and when I do it'll be as beauitful as a mother fucking sunrise.

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    I'll string together as many plastic beads that will fit around your neck
    I'll line this smoke with as much coke fifty dollars can buy
    We'll dance until the moonlight hugs our clothes
    And I’ll never regret my midnight serenade
    I'll write every word that pierces your spine
    So you dream of my next move and fear my checkmate
    We'll lay in bed until the sunlight stings our eyes
    And I'll never forget my midnight serenade
    I'll drive your heart right into my knife
    Point your fingers towards my gun
    We'll laugh until the dark sky fills our lungs
    And I'll always remember my midnight serenade
    I'll get you so high the clouds hold you back
    Then I'll whisper your suicide and drown you in your own tears
    I'll stare at your lifeless body until the moonlight grabs a hold of me
    And I've already forgotten my midnight serenade.

    Submitted on 2007-02-24 20:17:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Uh wow .....
    That made me hurt from the "serenade"
    This is a regretful sounding poem here.
    It made the think of the times I have
    [censored]ed up on something and made me
    Rethink a few regrets I have.

    I would add a few stanzas’ in the end to
    other show more pain from it or how easily you
    disregard it.

    Take care
    | Posted on 2007-02-28 00:00:00 | by Ace | [ Reply to This ]
      that's pretty damn scary. i really enjoyed the imagery though.

    'We'll laugh until the dark sky fills our lungs'

    nice macabre write.
    | Posted on 2007-02-25 00:00:00 | by JAcksonJr | [ Reply to This ]

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