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Die you bitch

Author: Black-Death
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Die you bitch

You took my heart from me...
Stole it away..
You gave me a fake heart..
Telling me you loved me..
You cut a peace of it off..
i huged your Fake heart..
You took a knife and cut it open..
i kissed yours..
You teased it.. saying you loved it..
Wall you dug your nails into it..
i took your heart and cracked it open..
Reading the note in it... Foold you..
... its time to get my heart back...

Submitted on 2007-02-24 20:40:47     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is really deep. I really like it.
| Posted on 2007-02-27 00:00:00 | by bigothgurl | [ Reply to This ]

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