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Submission Name: It could have been Sweet dots

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Author:	the_truth
ASL Info:	15/f/usa
Elite Ratio:	3.87 - 25/21/21
Words:	162

Class/Type:	Poetry/Serious
Total Views:	139
Average Vote:	5.0000
Bytes:	944

Description:
with one drop of blood, it is no longer sweet

It could have been Sweet dots

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24 of February 2007

It could have been Sweet

An innocent flower in a peaceful place
With one glance no one would know
With in its beauty it was a disgrace
Little work it would not show

On the single leaf of purity
Nothing seems unclean
Not known is a result of your immaturity
We are just caught in-between

Look closer at this white
There is something that is fresh and true
With one touch it shall ignite
If only you knew

The story of strength
Trying to live out your life
This is what she had to go to, this length
All this pain and strife

The blood stains what was once heaven is now hell
This was a moment of a single fleet
This is the final farewell
It could have been sweet

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very cool. Your rhyming is fantastic. It just moves along swiflty and effortlessly it seems like. I love how it ends.

Jamie
| Posted on 2007-03-03 00:00:00 | by blue_pixie_dust | [ Reply to This ]
wow. wow. wow

i really really like this.

its been a long time since i read something
that really sparked something in me.

this is great!
keep writing!

| Posted on 2007-02-24 00:00:00 | by hayl | [ Reply to This ]

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