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Author: siradrian
Elite Ratio:    4.87 - 213 /123 /68
Words: 111
Class/Type: Poetry /Serious
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Sit, feel it, do



The hands stray lightly
towards the goal so gently
the mind says no
just do not go
in that direction.

Will is subjugated
as nerves are negated
now mind says go
I feel so low
needing connection

as again, want arises
for the golden prizes
promised once before
not quite at my door
inducing such attention

At last within my grasp
no lock no key no hasp
to stop me now
so watch me how
I make lust love.

Submitted on 2007-02-25 02:01:49     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  very well defined and communicated, but i felt as if the scheme of the rhyme was a little forced in a few places

"At last within my grasp
no lock no key no hasp"
that one is mostly the one i stopped on, although using hasp is a pretty damned inventive idea.

for the most part, i related very well with this, and i dont just think its because i have messed up in this way more than a few times. thanks for sharing, and being so adept to transfer feelings to webspace.
| Posted on 2007-02-25 00:00:00 | by ryeker03 | [ Reply to This ]

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