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    dots Submission Name: Eos and Selenedots
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    Author: Clarkie
    ASL Info:    18/F/FL
    Elite Ratio:    5.33 - 101/76/36
    Words: 103
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 804
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    Description:
       This is fairly obvious, topic wise, but I like it. It was written by myself and my best friend, for a novel, and though it turned out not to quite fit with the novel, I was pretty happy with the outcome. Half of the credit of course goes to Juli, said best friend. :-D


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    dotsEos and Selenedots
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    She heard the whisper in the trees,
    It seemed to call her name,
    She heard the rustle in the leaves,
    The wood awakened when she came.
    She walked amidst the many boughs,
    Each footfall brought the blushing dew,
    Light did rest upon her brow,
    Her robes were of a scarlet hue.

    But, when nightingale expectant sings,
    Her light grows dull and evening falls.
    Scarlet trades to violet wings,
    Pale moonlight pays her nightly call.
    She floats across the twilight sky,
    Stars clinging to her ebon gown
    Moonbeams twinkle in her eye,
    Soon darkness too must pass the crown.




    Submitted on 2007-02-25 10:49:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hi,

    Liked the way you led the reader, and I see this in all your writing, the way you live yourself into the poetry, that is a gift, great write,

    Liked the following:
    "Stars clinging to her ebon gown
    Moonbeams twinkle in her eye,
    Soon darkness too must pass the crown."

    But the poem seem to miss the end, or maybe its just me.

    Kind regards
    Eric
    | Posted on 2007-02-28 00:00:00 | by bornx2000 | [ Reply to This ]
      Ooo, I have to say I enjoyed the title of this, because it helped with your personification aspect of it. I liked the last line of the last stanza,
    "Soon darkness too must pass the crown."
    It sort of reminded me of life, and how it's a cycle of light and dark, and neither lasts forever. It reminds me of Samhain, and how it's a period of darkness, and it seems it would never end, but you know Yule is coming. Hehe. The imagery and personification her I have to say was really pretty, fascinating, actually. Thanks for the post, this was a beautiful read.
    Be at peace.
    ~Azura*
    | Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by EmpathicAya | [ Reply to This ]


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