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    dots Submission Name: Mind Helldots

    Author: Mr.Ordinary
    ASL Info:    21/M/Navy
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 64/102/41
    Words: 65
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       yeah about mind hell, it like the only place that i ever get lost and dont know what to do. because your mind allways looks for whats best for you and somtimes there isnt a best choice anmd you get lost

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    dotsMind Helldots

    There is a prison
    So strong, so tall
    So immense
    That No one can escape

    Such a terrible place
    Could consume even the
    Purest of souls

    Society call this
    Prison the human
    I call this place

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      A girl asked me lately if I believed in the whole heaven and hell thing after death. I told her I wasn't sure I was too preoccupied with the whole heaven and hell thing here on earth that we deal with the reality at hand. :) I liked this.

    Could have used some more elaboration on each though perhaps, thought it could have been expanded for more substance.
    | Posted on 2011-09-05 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      A common view point, this almost struck me as a comedy, so plainly stated that it feels like you are just tossing a cigarette butt out the window.

    It is casual in its doom.

    Do you write sweet things :P ?

    Thanks for sharing I did enjoy this piece

    | Posted on 2011-08-09 00:00:00 | by lori_tab | [ Reply to This ]
      okay i have a question? When you wrote this do you believe it is true, that your mind makes your decisions for you? My different view when I read this was that it is not your mind doing what is best for you. Your body does, reacting with hormones and your surroundings the concept can be altered.
    | Posted on 2007-11-27 00:00:00 | by Arieslove | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting very Interesting.
    | Posted on 2007-03-17 00:00:00 | by DonkeyMan | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting, indeed. It sounds like someone trapped inside their own mind and it's like a prision to them. Nice work.

    | Posted on 2007-02-25 00:00:00 | by FarFromSanityy | [ Reply to This ]
      Interesting, indeed. It sounds like someone trapped inside their own mind and it's like a prision to them. Nice work.

    | Posted on 2007-02-25 00:00:00 | by FarFromSanityy | [ Reply to This ]
      It's pretty good, but if only you could make it alittle longer.
    | Posted on 2007-02-25 00:00:00 | by Two Meters Away | [ Reply to This ]
      i really like this piece. it's so true, good write. joanna
    | Posted on 2007-02-25 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this. It's interesting.
    | Posted on 2007-02-25 00:00:00 | by ChimeraNytemare | [ Reply to This ]

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