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    dots Submission Name: Just a girldots
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    Author: Mr.Ordinary
    ASL Info:    21/M/Navy
    Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 64/102/41
    Words: 151
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1205
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 911



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       yeah ive been working on this alot its not done becasue its not perfect but i wanted to see what you all think


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    dotsJust a girldots
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    Just a girl
    So simple
    Nothing complex
    Nothing to worry about

    They enjoyed every moment
    As the perfect moment it was
    Held hands for the first time
    Looked into each others eyes
    And fell in love
    Truly
    For the very first time

    But it hurt when she slammed the door in his face
    But nothing is lost forever
    When love is on your side
    Eventually after the pain had faded
    She came back to hold hands
    Looked into each others eyes
    And fell in love again

    He had never felt so lost
    For the man that he had come to be
    Was not the one he had once been
    The love was still there
    But so was the pain

    He called upon the hourglass
    To tell him how life will be
    If you ever met this man you would know
    Its me




    Submitted on 2007-02-25 10:58:42     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      three years latter and this story is still true, same girl, same story. man i wish i could move on!
    | Posted on 2010-08-27 00:00:00 | by Mr.Ordinary | [ Reply to This ]
      I realy like this.. the story is great and I actualy cant find anything that would need to be changed... So is this girl still on your mind?
    Candy (amanda)
    | Posted on 2007-02-27 00:00:00 | by allmine | [ Reply to This ]
      this is good, i like the story you tied into it. joanna
    | Posted on 2007-02-25 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]
      ooh interesting. i like the story line and the personalization at the end. so is she still on your mind?
    | Posted on 2007-02-25 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]


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