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    dots Submission Name: PLease hear thisdots
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    Author: bleeding_sin
    ASL Info:    16/F/OR
    Elite Ratio:    3.03 - 54/68/57
    Words: 201
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 462
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    Description:
       I really am feeling t his. And I need advice on it. Please leave a commet. It is so important to do it. Right now. I need to know people are at least listening. I can nopt excape my feelings and I need advice on them. So pleace commet this.


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    dotsPLease hear thisdots
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    Help!!
    I am reaching out
    I don't know what to do
    It feels as if I am alone
    Walking the streets with out anyone there
    I use to know what was happening
    But know It is all gone
    Tears fill my eyes
    I feel so alone
    Like I am blind
    In a world where you depend on your eyes
    I lost my friends
    I have lost myself
    How do you try and save your friend
    WHen you have lost yourself?
    She broken
    And so am I
    I want to fix her
    Sheld her from all hurt
    Make it where she is always happy
    No pain
    Can you help me?
    I am so confused
    I am also in love
    Trying so hard not to screw it up
    I feel like I am losing it all
    My brain can think
    My eyes are blind
    My reactions are not what I want them to be
    So please help me?
    How do I help the one person I truly love
    She is my, Best friend
    She knows me inside and out
    But I and falling away from her
    I can't take it
    I am screaming out
    HELP!!
    PLease!!!
    HELP!!




    Submitted on 2007-02-25 16:00:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is raw and full of emotion... I do not want to get stuck saying the same things that other people have already said, and because you dont know me, I fear that you will disreguard this next statement (please dont)...
    There is always something better, I can see you are faced with confusion and heartache, and are looking for all the 'right' answers. But maybe all the right answers dont exist, and in searching for them you are making it harder on yourself, maybe you should let the answers come to you in time. Your cry for HELP rings loud and true, and I am sorry for that, if I could take away the pain I would...
    I'm sorry if I was not at all helpful, I wish I could say more to help, but Only you can help yourself...
    And in fear of sounding too much like a self-help book I am going to leave...

    ~HannaH
    | Posted on 2007-04-21 00:00:00 | by seriouscutter19 | [ Reply to This ]
      Time moves on and so do those feelings of hopelessness. You will find ur way. It might take awhile though. As for your friends and u growing apart, that is a part of life. Just cherish the times you have now. Time changes people, somtimes for the better and somtimes for the worse... Take care!!

    XoXo,

    }i{Renae}i{
    | Posted on 2007-04-20 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]
      Time moves on and so do those feelings of hopelessness. You will find ur way. It might take awhile though. As for your friends and u growing apart, that is a part of life. Just cherish the times you have now. Time changes people, somtimes for the better and somtimes for the worse... Take care!!

    XoXo,

    }i{Renae}i{
    | Posted on 2007-04-20 00:00:00 | by Poetic_tragedy6 | [ Reply to This ]
      I could not just pass this cry for help. I read you are in much pain. I recognise my self in that, especially how i used to feel one year ago. When people said to me it would all be ok, everything would get better, i did not believe them and it was not what i wanted to hear. I ignored everything they said, but in the end i found out that i did not stay at that same place forever. I climbed up again, slowly, very slowly, got thrown down again too, but still I went on. PLease don't lose sight, because if you do, , you will have lost hope.. and when that happens.. I don't know what then. But you really should talk about this. Can't you talk to your friend? She has to know you are missing her, that you need her, and if you tell her things which are very close to you, you will grow in your friendship, which will bind you and that's what you need. Because you are afraid of losing her. You could also talk to a schoolcouncelor, and that is not because i think you are a psycho. I never wanted to go there, but there was just someone who pushed me, and really my counselor is a very good help. Even if he only sits there and listens to me. .. It's not like he is a psychiatrist and you are a crazy patient. Because I can see you are not. I hope my advice will help you, even if only a little. be strong.

    -Janneke
    | Posted on 2007-03-04 00:00:00 | by Darth Zeus | [ Reply to This ]
      if i could and if i were the hugging type of person, i would give you a hug. however, let's face it, hugs don't usually solve anything. i wish i could help, but im going through the same things on this side of the world. and i haven't the foggiest notion what to do.
    i do, however, disagree with drkpoet. i dont think this is shallow. this is purely what you were feeling and i think you scream your pain exceptionally well. i wish i could help. i really really do. my only advice? keep your head above the water, and if that wont work, grow gills and get used to it. moral of the story? life sucks.

    i tip my hat and bid thee farewell.
    | Posted on 2007-02-28 00:00:00 | by PoeticNonsense | [ Reply to This ]
      this piece is written with great emotion, and confusion.. sometimes the easiest way to seek answers is continue to write what is on your mind... the answers that will work the best in the situation that you are in will only come from the person that is closest to the situation, you... therefore your cry for help is a suggestion that i could make, grab yourself a notebook, sit and reflect and bring about all the feelings you get thinking of how you are going to help this person, write them down. just go with the flow, don't make them a poem, just random thoughts more or less... the sit and think about yourself.. how can you make this love know you are there, who are the people that would be effected by your death... write that all down, read over the things that flowed from your feelings, dont hold back the tears, let them flow on your paper just as easy as the ink from your pen flows.... this piece is a great start on how to get the emotion out, the feeling wasnt very deep that i got, kind of hollow inside, seems to just be brushing the surface to something that may seem so cliché to some, but so new and wet to you.. write it, describe it in detail... give your work light, that soon will be the HELP this poem asks for from others, and you'll see that just by writing you'll be able to solve many many more problems!
    once again, great start, but it just brushed the surface!
    | Posted on 2007-02-25 00:00:00 | by drkpoet | [ Reply to This ]


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