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    dots Submission Name: Delaware Proved Short.dots
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    Author: emo-tastic
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    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsDelaware Proved Short.dots
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    Iíve been driving nine days now.

    Headed north on 95
    and kept on adding layers.

    Hit traffic in Richmond,
    exhaust pipes, exhaustion.

    Things picked up in Maryland
    troll toll booths collected fees.

    Delaware proved short.

    Headbeams turned on lighting
    undisclosed locations.

    My exit came up fast
    I fumbled for a turn
    signal and panicked out loud.

    Windshield wipers furious
    backlights blazing brighter at
    80 miles per hour

    no passenger no cargo

    no turn signal

    no exit.




    Submitted on 2007-02-25 22:10:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I very much enjoyed this. As Nihilum said, haunting. There is a strong visual image here and I feel it could also relate to life, so frenzied,
    we never get where we wanted to go, because we missed the appropriate exit. Very good. Q
    | Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by quelyn | [ Reply to This ]
      A very haunting poem-- I love it. The whole time I was just waiting for the crash. The description of the rain really emphasized everything; nice touch.
    I'm guessing this is a true story?
    | Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by Nihilum | [ Reply to This ]


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