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    dots Submission Name: My Souldots
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    Author: Jessibel
    ASL Info:    19/F/FL
    Elite Ratio:    6.12 - 6/4/4
    Words: 274
    Class/Type: Random Thoughts/Misc
    Total Views: 476
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1487



    Description:
       I was at a writing camp with my best friend and I was in a creative writing class. So, we were given play doh and asked to make something that we thought represented our soul and then write about it. Perhaps because I lack artistic skills or because I generally love the night sky, I made a star and a moon. It's a little corny I guess, but I'm a corny person so it's expected lol


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    dotsMy Souldots
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    Cloudless night skies that hold enough stars to boggle the mind, have always been God's greatest achievement in my eyes. There has been many a quiet summer night where I have lain on the grass staring into the dark, starry sky thinking thoughts of life and love. Throughout the years of my life the thoughts, of course, have changed. I have gone from jungle gym stories, bestfriend fights, bad grades, good grades, boyfriend troubles, to thoughts on life's meaning and the ideas of what true love really is. The summer night sky has become my confident, the place I go to when I feel that my mind is too full. Letting my mind wander when I look at the night sky gives me a feeling of utter freedom. The sky shows me the universe and its endless possibilities. I feel invinscible yet not all powerful. The sky represents who I am and in effect shows my soul. I am filled with endless opportunities. And as the years go by I realize that my past, my present, and my future have made, make, and will make me the person I was, am, and will be. All the stories of my past created my soul and essence of today. So in effect, the night sky becomes my own personal history book. It shows me the past while declaring that the present is livable and the future is not so impossible. The night sky describes the very essence of my soul: my faults, my mistakes, my good intentions, my honor, my love, my falls, my strength, my fear, my insecurities, my treasuries, my hopes, and my dreams.




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      For random thoughts, this is truly amazing. I love your in depth explanation of what the night sky is to you, basically that it is you. You are something with endless opportunities, a soul that will live forever, and most importantly: you are something unique and beautiful!
    The subject is great, and the writing is awesome. The line I love most is:

    "And as the years go by I realize that my past, my present, and my future have made, make, and will make me the person I was, am, and will be."

    It's very touching. Keep up the work!!!

    -angel-
    | Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by just an angel | [ Reply to This ]


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