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    dots Submission Name: Never Got it Rightdots
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    Author: homeless
    ASL Info:    30
    Elite Ratio:    7.61 - 29/18/23
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Poetry/Sorry
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    dotsNever Got it Rightdots
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    I fought the tide
    I never got it right

    I died inside
    The last we spoke - that night

    I didn't know what to say
    Didn't know what to do

    I watched my fears
    I saw me losing you

    But I've always been lonely
    It's the only thing I know
    I was scared to stay
    So I chose to go

    And I've always been lonely
    It's the only thing I know
    I was scared to say
    What our feelings show

    I still remember
    your eyes; your smile

    I still remember
    how we slept - for a little while

    Now here I am
    On my knees

    Begging forgiveness -
    for my travesties

    But I've always been lonely
    It's the only thing I know
    I was scared to stay
    So I chose to go

    And I've always been lonely
    It's the only thing I know
    I was scared to say
    What our feelings show

    I've always been lonely
    That is no excuse
    Now I've paid the price
    The cost was losing you...




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