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    dots Submission Name: Without Youdots
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    Author: homeless
    ASL Info:    30
    Elite Ratio:    7.61 - 29/18/23
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsWithout Youdots
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    If my words had wings
    They would soar to you

    If my thoughts had eyes
    They would watch over you

    If my dreams were hope
    They would be with you

    If my prayers were hands
    They would protect you

    Yet, with great irony
    They are none of these things

    My thoughts are the hands that hold you close

    My dreams are the eyes that see you when I cannot

    My prayers rise upon wings to be with you

    My words drown in the oceans of silence without you......




    Submitted on 2007-02-25 23:14:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Unfortunately, I enjoyed the poem, however I cannot pass comment as I have read some of your previous comments on other peoples work and fear that you may shred me to pieces with words :o) would you perhaps be terrible insulted if I said it was flawless?
    | Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by MornSweetSong | [ Reply to This ]


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