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    dots Submission Name: Mother May Idots
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    Author: homeless
    ASL Info:    30
    Elite Ratio:    7.61 - 29/18/23
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsMother May Idots
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    Mother May I
    kneel to pray -- I
    wish to wake -- I
    wish to take -- I
    wish to break
    Free

    Can not be
    What you wish of me
    your only son -- me
    a reluctant puppet -- me
    on your strings -- me
    to dance and sing -- me
    conceived to be deceived --me
    Finding life
    Has a price

    Ready Run -- I'm
    Trying to flee -- I'm
    stuck in your cycle -- I'm
    lost in denial -- I'm
    smelling liberty -- I'm
    determined to be -- I'm
    bleeding you away -- I'm
    bleeding you away...




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