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    dots Submission Name: Forgotten Jazzdots
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    Author: homeless
    ASL Info:    30
    Elite Ratio:    7.61 - 29/18/23
    Words: 96
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsForgotten Jazzdots
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    She sits before her altar
    Sullen eyes, worn and weary
    Facing the music, stirring keys
    To days now past

    Each note slides
    From her fingers,
    In rhythm with
    Tears upon her cheek

    A distant saxophone's solemn prayer,
    consoles the mourning ivories

    Melodies of Memories
    Recalled with each chord
    Relived with each crescendo
    Bittersweet as the wine upon her lips

    And so she plays -

    For the furtive glances, long since gone
    For the songs, no longer sung
    For the guitar that no longer weeps
    For the past, in which she keeps...




    Submitted on 2007-02-25 23:35:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is amazing! when I love a poem..I don't think there's much to say..either it'll change the poem, it won't be original, or it just won't be your poem anymore..so all I have to say is..Wonderful!!!
    | Posted on 2007-02-27 00:00:00 | by Ani | [ Reply to This ]


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