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    dots Submission Name: Letter to Miss Intentionsdots
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    Author: homeless
    ASL Info:    30
    Elite Ratio:    7.01 - 29/19/36
    Words: 193
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1025
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    Bytes: 1562



    Description:
       When reading this.. start off confused and you can see suddenly where it fades into anger in the 7th 'stanza'.

    I might record it and post along with the piece...

    Keep in mind that this is 'spoken word' so the standard confines of grammatical form do not apply since the strength is function.

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    dotsLetter to Miss Intentionsdots
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    Tell me if
    Something is amiss
    What became of
    Our first kiss

    To whom are you intended
    Just how are you inclined?
    Where is our future
    That fate has divined

    Your words a salve
    Of lofty intentions
    With readied defenses
    If shown more than affections

    I want to know
    Your thoughts, where they go
    I want to see
    If you're thinking of me

    My thoughts
    Are stuck on you; yet
    If you need to be free
    I'll let you be

    I can't be your fling
    Caught on a string
    One of the few
    To claim piece of you

    All the sometimes
    and maybes
    Are driving me
    CRAZY

    I'm not your sweetheart
    You're not my lady
    The games that you play
    Go beyond shady!!

    Now can you fix
    this thing that's amiss?
    I'm tired,
    Pretending;
    We're captured in bliss!
    I no longer go on
    Believing this shit!

    My world is up-ended
    Patience is bended!
    Refusal to play
    The fool, as intended!




    Submitted on 2007-02-25 23:38:00     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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