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    dots Submission Name: N.B.S Devastationdots
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    Author: Dark Divinity
    ASL Info:    20 Male Michigan
    Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 23/20/8
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 1056
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 484



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    dotsN.B.S Devastationdots
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    Oh these eyes
    What these eyes are
    Seek what they reap
    Their destiny to sow
    That my devils might keep
    And never take my soul
    The pain I've seen
    THe blood I've cried
    The eyes of a genocide
    I'm dead inside
    Where's the serenity
    The calm we fear
    The storm after
    the destruction near
    Oh these eyes
    What are these eyes
    To be never more
    Never to be seen




    Submitted on 2007-02-26 01:22:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      like the flow of this piece a lot. it's one of those poems that you have to read over again to get the full impact and you get something different each time. well done

    kat
    | Posted on 2007-02-28 00:00:00 | by moonlitsky | [ Reply to This ]
      I'm dumb and don't really disassemble poetry for critical analysis, however it comes to pass that this piece is powerful and thought evoking. Makes a girl go all icky ;op

    Well done
    | Posted on 2007-02-27 00:00:00 | by MornSweetSong | [ Reply to This ]


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