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N.B.S Devastation

Author: Dark Divinity
ASL Info:    20 Male Michigan
Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 23 /20 /8
Words: 69
Class/Type: Poetry /Dark
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Roar... PLease comment on this. I wana know your thoughts?

N.B.S Devastation

Oh these eyes
What these eyes are
Seek what they reap
Their destiny to sow
That my devils might keep
And never take my soul
The pain I've seen
THe blood I've cried
The eyes of a genocide
I'm dead inside
Where's the serenity
The calm we fear
The storm after
the destruction near
Oh these eyes
What are these eyes
To be never more
Never to be seen

Submitted on 2007-02-26 01:22:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  like the flow of this piece a lot. it's one of those poems that you have to read over again to get the full impact and you get something different each time. well done

| Posted on 2007-02-28 00:00:00 | by moonlitsky | [ Reply to This ]
  I'm dumb and don't really disassemble poetry for critical analysis, however it comes to pass that this piece is powerful and thought evoking. Makes a girl go all icky ;op

Well done
| Posted on 2007-02-27 00:00:00 | by MornSweetSong | [ Reply to This ]

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