N.B.S Devastation

Author: Dark Divinity ASL Info:    20 Male Michigan Elite Ratio:    3.89 - 23 /20 /8 Words: 69

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N.B.S Devastation

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Oh these eyes What these eyes are Seek what they reap Their destiny to sow That my devils might keep And never take my soul The pain I've seen THe blood I've cried The eyes of a genocide I'm dead inside Where's the serenity The calm we fear The storm after the destruction near Oh these eyes What are these eyes To be never more Never to be seen

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like the flow of this piece a lot. it's one of those poems that you have to read over again to get the full impact and you get something different each time. well done kat

| Posted on 2007-02-28 00:00:00 | by moonlitsky | [ Reply to This ]

I'm dumb and don't really disassemble poetry for critical analysis, however it comes to pass that this piece is powerful and thought evoking. Makes a girl go all icky ;op Well done

| Posted on 2007-02-27 00:00:00 | by MornSweetSong | [ Reply to This ]

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