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    dots Submission Name: ...and say it rightdots
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    Author: DAlin
    Elite Ratio:    2.12 - 82/137/75
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 667
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dots...and say it rightdots
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    Is this a world of beauty roses ?
    Is this a world of kiss and tell ?
    Is this a world of over doses ?
    A place where you can sell your soul ?

    Like animals we learned to kill
    And like no other monster, run...
    ...Is this a master plan, a deal ?
    Too bad, the damage is now here...and done.

    Mirror by mirror
    Day by day

    Killer by killer
    Night by night

    Please say a prayer...
    ...and say it right.




    Submitted on 2007-02-26 04:35:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      nice poem. i like how u ask a question and leave iyt with a .....

    yeahh.
    | Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by darkness | [ Reply to This ]
      this piece is so wonderful, it took me by surprise i'm still not quite sure waht to say about it. all i know is that i loved it.
    Joanna
    | Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]
      I was astounded by this particular piece as the imagery was basic and yet soulful, I enjoy the way something as stunning as a rose was used and then was cut off by the 'overdoses'.
    'Like animals we learned to kill' makes me feel bad for not being a vegetarian ;o) it makes me thing of evolution, a rather pleasant sort of nostalgia hehe.
    'to bad, the damage is now here...and done' I think this is a strong sentiment especially given the current climatic issues, I like the use of this in regards to how dreadful the world can be sometimes.
    Overall I thoroughly enjoyed it, soul food, one might say.
    | Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by MornSweetSong | [ Reply to This ]


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