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Submission Name: Tinted Sky dots

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Author:	moonlitsky
Elite Ratio:	6.33 - 55/33/12
Words:	96

Class/Type:	Poetry/Misc
Total Views:	172
Average Vote:	4.0000
Bytes:	635

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hard to remember things like this now... *sigh*

Tinted Sky dots

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I looked out
The window of your car
To find a sky
Painted purple and grey
I whispered your name
Without tearing my eyes away
And told you how beautiful
I thought it was
You smiled back in amusement
Pointed ahead
Saying
“Babe, it’s only the tint
That makes it look that way.”
Reluctantly I focused my eyes
To the road before me
Looked at the pale blue sky
I hadn’t seen
But had been all along
Wishing
Praying
With all hope left in me
What I had seen out the window
Was real

Submitted on 2007-02-26 05:27:30 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  this poem has a bittersweet taste to it. you had me thinking the sky was really that beautiful at the time, and then it turned out to be false. too good to be true.

don't you hate that saying?

anyway, i liked the poem. very cute. i wonder how you felt when he told you it was only the tint on the window..

were you embarressed? disappointed?

good poem. keep writing
| Posted on 2007-03-09 00:00:00 | by slickviper097 | [ Reply to This ]
  i loved this. it is very much awesome. reality is not attractive as the fantasy sometimes. figures it would take another person to bring you down out of the clouds. good hopes and dreams to you and yours. awesomeness
| Posted on 2007-02-28 00:00:00 | by disillusion | [ Reply to This ]
  This is great. It is indeed simple, but so nice to read. It's hopeful, which is something we all need in this world. Thanks!

-angel-
| Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by just an angel | [ Reply to This ]
  Great peice. It was simple, but I liked it a lot. I wasn't really in a thinking mood, so I was going to comment later, but this poem was pretty straight forward. Good imagery....

People take so much forgranted, and it's good that you wrote a poem to make people realise that.

Anyway, very good job, and keep up the good work.

Sincerely,
Draigon
| Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by Draigon | [ Reply to This ]
  its a talent to be able to write in a simple manner than in all actuality isn't simple at all. made me smile. hats off to you.
| Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by lark | [ Reply to This ]
  I LOVE TINTED COLOURED SKIES.

A simple piece thats easy to understand and stands for itself. Imagery was fiine, but I tihnk that since you are mesmerised by the sky, you may render yourself speechless (a little), so I think lack of description is alright. Ya get what I mean? =P

Not many appreciate such a beauty as much. I've finally found someone who does love it like me; YOU.

Keep writing. I believe some of your thoughts are concealed somewhere.... out there.

Ryuki.
| Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by RyukiTZR | [ Reply to This ]
  It was really good, but Im not really into that kinda stuff. I give it 10's across the board though.
| Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by Dark Divinity | [ Reply to This ]

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