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    dots Submission Name: Swiveldots

    Author: AeThe Lost Poet
    ASL Info:    19/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 147/184/122
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 524
    Average Vote:    2.0000
    Bytes: 990


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    Would you write that,
    If I wrote that, too,?
    Would you match my words,
    In Is- Ls- and Us?
    Or switch with it,
    And sit still, stare me in my face,
    Tell me Im a liar,
    And put me down in my place,
    Tell me you believed in me,
    And regretted it, too,
    How you would hug me,
    But Id hold back to you
    So Id swing this, swing that,
    Just to let you know,
    I could never tell you a lie,
    I could never let you go,
    I never meant to hurt you,
    Or ever meant to show,
    The selfish side of me,
    You where never meant to know,
    So who am I to be?
    What am I to do?
    Which words I said do you,
    Want me to prove?
    Id swing this, swing that,
    Never thought youd swing back,
    And in my mind,
    I have to think that,
    It was so unfair,
    Even if it was true,
    Youd hug me,
    Id hold back to you

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