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    dots Submission Name: out of gripdots
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    Author: DontLetGo421
    Elite Ratio:    2.18 - 118/238/141
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dotsout of gripdots
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    these moments are slipping out of grip

    words unspoken moisten my lip

    we attempt to make each moment last

    as each second fades in from present to past

    stay, stay with me even though we spoke such cruel thoughts

    stay, stay with me even though your priceless love could easily be bought




    Submitted on 2007-02-26 13:33:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      love dont cost a thing this poems ace doe
    | Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by thewantedwords | [ Reply to This ]
      this is so simple and your feelings are put in to it in a way that I love it. there is none of that read between the lines stuff and you get right up in the readers face with how you want it to sound, at least thats what i think. but this is very good. joanna
    | Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]
      I love it. This one of the of my new favorites. It is bring a thought of happiness from nothing. 10's
    | Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by Dark Divinity | [ Reply to This ]
      AHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!this is identical to the peice i was working on. well the idea is! errrrr! oh well ive loved you r work in the past and again you have found the heart of my problems in my life. its like ether we are having the same problem or you really know how to write! *WOW*
    | Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by Mr.Ordinary | [ Reply to This ]


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