out of grip by DontLetGo421

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Submission Name: out of grip dots

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Author:	DontLetGo421
Elite Ratio:	2.18 - 118/238/141
Words:	57

Class/Type:	Poetry/Love
Total Views:	1181
Average Vote:	5.0000
Bytes:	358

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out of grip dots

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these moments are slipping out of grip

words unspoken moisten my lip

we attempt to make each moment last

as each second fades in from present to past

stay, stay with me even though we spoke such cruel thoughts

stay, stay with me even though your priceless love could easily be bought

Submitted on 2007-02-26 13:33:46 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  love dont cost a thing this poems ace doe

| Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by thewantedwords | [ Reply to This ]
  this is so simple and your feelings are put in to it in a way that I love it. there is none of that read between the lines stuff and you get right up in the readers face with how you want it to sound, at least thats what i think. but this is very good. joanna
| Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]
  I love it. This one of the of my new favorites. It is bring a thought of happiness from nothing. 10's
| Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by Dark Divinity | [ Reply to This ]
  AHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!this is identical to the peice i was working on. well the idea is! errrrr! oh well ive loved you r work in the past and again you have found the heart of my problems in my life. its like ether we are having the same problem or you really know how to write! *WOW*
| Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by Mr.Ordinary | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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