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    dots Submission Name: tie thyself to a worlddots
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    Author: disturbedx1000
    ASL Info:    28/m/ny
    Elite Ratio:    3.67 - 204/326/124
    Words: 297
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
    Total Views: 729
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       a old poem of mine i felt like reposting. it was of a dream of mine i had a long time ago


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    the day so dark,

    the moon and sun colide,

    creating a boundry of heaven and hell,

    neither side i will desend too,

    i will rise to the narrow line in between,

    for that is my domain,

    in this place of paradise....

    you'll find me in blood soaked showers,

    shedding the tears of my fears,

    here i'll lose no one but myself,

    i'll sleep on a bed of chains that tie me down,

    with barbed wire pillows so soft that they only scrape my face,

    when i wake i'll drink the blood i spilt the night before,

    i'll eat the flesh i lost in my sleep,

    whatever i lose in this paradise...

    i'll regain on my own,

    this is the way i live,

    the only way i know how,

    i never suffer in the pain,

    i thrive on it,

    feed off of it,

    so in a way...

    i feed on myself,

    devoiring all that i am,

    slowly becoming the shadows that bound me to this world,

    as my pain becomes greater,

    the sun and moon press together,

    expanding my boundries,

    expanding te ways for me to grow stronger...

    so now...

    now do you see my pain?

    do you see how i thrive on my own?

    do you see why you fear pain?

    it's because i feed of it,

    i take it in,

    and with your pain i feed off,

    i feed of your very soul...

    with your pain...

    you cause me pain...

    so now with your help,

    i shall become stronger,

    i shall become whole....




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    ||| Comments |||
      ...that so blew away my Fairy-tale of Death...which had, in a round about way, the same theme. Your pain is not pain, it's life, and with that life you expand you become stronger ,greater, more infinite. you are your own higher power, a self-sustaining entity of profound wonder.

    ..at least those are the thougths that come to my head when i read it. i find it hard to believe that no one commented on this. It was very strong. a few times i think you meant 'off' instead of 'of', but other than that...it was great.


    Awesome work,

    Misty*~*
    | Posted on 2007-05-09 00:00:00 | by misty_of_moon | [ Reply to This ]


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