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Sora


Author: Squall Leon Hea
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Words: 75
Class/Type: Poetry /Depressed
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I know some grammer mistakes , but bare with me


Sora



Under a tree I sat
Looking at a flaming sky

I look , whaere am at
Everything dead *sigh*

I look at the tree
Almost black and bare

Why did this have to be
Why life is unfair

Clutching to my legs
Holding them to my chest

Atear begs
To fall , I wiped it with my fist

Now am all alone
Looking at the rise of Dawn




Submitted on 2007-02-26 14:17:37     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This is a pretty awesome idea... in some parts the grammar mistakes kinda wrecked the flow but I am sure when thats all fixed up it will be excellent...
I like the way it is written... but I think it could improve if it was elaborated on...
maybe more on why life is unfair... iono...

keep up the good work
Hannah
| Posted on 2007-03-03 00:00:00 | by seriouscutter19 | [ Reply to This ]
  I really liked this but wish it could have been longer. I liked the *sigh* thing.
| Posted on 2007-02-28 00:00:00 | by crazy_83 | [ Reply to This ]
  is this just a poem or feelings?are u depressed?*hugs*

good poem,keep it up

~safire~
| Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by girly101 | [ Reply to This ]
  you have a pretty good idea going here and once you get around the grammar mistakes its a very good poem. joanna
| Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by heartless_ | [ Reply to This ]


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