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    dots Submission Name: The Ruined Milldots
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    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Dark
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    dotsThe Ruined Milldots
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    I took the road to Owens’ Mill one eve,
    When growing dusk its eerie shadows throws,
    Where thoughts of ashy phantoms there will weave
    Fantastic specters on the icy snows.

    My horse, as well, seemed scarcely now immune
    To fear without a name, unknown, unheard.
    We stopped to watch the rising of the Moon,
    Above the headstones of those long interred.

    And in that silence, there the ruined mill
    Loomed to our right as grim as mythic Dis.
    Its empty windows sent a psychic chill
    Like frozen lips from some vampiric kiss.

    Against the Moon its walls were limned, askew,
    And beckoned me sweet sadness to distil
    And sing laments and long lost lovers sue,
    There in the Moon, the night so deathly still.





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      You seem to narrate through every poem a story of captions. Moments your mind catches just to play and knit them into a fibre of magicka pouring through your words. Dreams might be quite like this. Very much like this actually. Ethereal, surreal yet so clear your growing fantasies. Wonderful to read.
    | Posted on 2007-03-03 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      I love the way you always write about the moon, and your allusions are impeccable in your writing! I loved that you brought up Dis. Your poems always seem to keep to the same message and every line strings to the next with absolute perfection. You have become one of my favorite writers because your style is so lovely. Another favorite!
    | Posted on 2007-02-26 00:00:00 | by awastedsky | [ Reply to This ]


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