Nice. I really enjoy this piece because it seems to describe something that is rather hard to understand without a complex thought out verse in-poem like you have done. words like, 'racing', 'limbs', 'throbbing', and 'potent sighs' all seem very sensual and so it makes the poems imagery very longing it seems. If anything is to be said of improvement all i can say is that the second stanza breaks rather sharply from the firsts style and overall identity, which, to me, is a bit confusing but also gives a feeling of an odd surprise which is almost acceptable perhaps if there was more of an intended structural balance....yeah. All in all i think that what goes on in ones mind is one of the most interesting aspects to explore with poetry since poetry itself is intrinsically a statement of the mind. mmmyeah im rambling now but anyway i really enjoyed it and keep up the good work.
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