First, let me pick: S1: Should be “ocean’s”. “washing” doesn’t work – maybe “washed”?
S2: The rays don’t bring the night, but there is always “poetic license”.
Throughout this poem I notice an excessive use of present participles – submitting, washing [in a row, too!] touching, bringing, etc. After a while it dulls the ears from repetition.
As for the “philosophical mood”, I prefer to think of it as thoughts – and great thoughts at that. I like the ideas a lot, and I like your approach to presenting them. I don’t care for some of the verbiage and feel it could use (and deserves) some editing.
fred
Submission Name: Victims of the Strength of Life
