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    dots Submission Name: melancholy dots
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    Author: muhammed
    ASL Info:    23/male/Egypt
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 87/124/112
    Words: 284
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsmelancholy dots
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    My destiny has already been written
    (but not me who wrote)
    I'm just going in that drawing way ...
    Like a wind mastered boat,

    holding an imaginary wheel think I steer
    but I was driven by that norhen wind
    To that distention that dark has paint
    through the untrodden ways, that very few have want
    furnitured with only gleam of hopes,dreams of gold
    and nothing to prevent
    me from drowning, under the flood descend
    and the beneath call...
    no matter for a troth or gold ,the journey you will spend
    it's the same sad end .
    you will go where all well beings transcend


    but I still starving olne
    in that rainy moonless storm
    and some times I think
    That the water below it's more warm
    O quiet...falling
    And the longing for rest

    but I still starving
    with waves up and down
    But I'm not yet drowning
    may be..
    because I'm not mint to drawn

    II

    and my dreams
    pass Beyond the horizons
    and the limit of illusion...

    Some where, some time ,
    Behind all the lands and seas
    The final rest ,peace
    The mining , the true

    III

    But moon or fire you realize
    That all that..
    all that been done before
    There so many gone from this door
    and retrained no more
    To tell us about the shore
    and all that we can hear
    is the wave distant roar

    Iv

    but still the reverie,the journey
    and invitation you cannot ignore

    the boat must go...
    and retrained never more




    Submitted on 2007-02-27 05:44:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      some grammer mistakes but really really really good imagery and symbolism. your poems are all so meaningful!
    | Posted on 2007-04-13 00:00:00 | by Keller | [ Reply to This ]
      that is a nice poem. i could picture iyt like a story.

    Some where some time
    Behind all the lands and seas
    The final rest ....peace
    The mining the clue the true

    a life story till death

    and because im dyiing for a voyage...

    Aylin

    | Posted on 2007-02-27 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]


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