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    dots Submission Name: The Questdots

    Author: muhammed
    ASL Info:    23/male/Egypt
    Elite Ratio:    2.33 - 89/129/124
    Words: 276
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsThe Questdots

    My destiny has already been written
    not me who will wrote
    I'm just going in that drawing way ...
    Like a wind mastered boat,

    holding an imaginary wheel, think I steer
    but Iím driven by that northern wind
    To that distention that dark has paint
    through the untrodden ways, that very few have want
    furniture with only gleam of hopes, dreams of gold !
    With nothing to prevent
    me from drowning, under the flood descend
    and the beneath call...
    no matter for a troth or gold,
    The journey you will spend
    it's the same dark, sad end.

    but you still starving alone
    in that rainy moonless storm
    and some times you think
    That the water below it's more warm
    O quiet, fallingÖ
    And the longing for rest

    but I still starving
    with waves up and down
    But I'm not yet drowning
    may be..
    Because I'm not mint to drawn


    and my dreams
    pass behind the horizons
    and the limit of illusion...

    Some where, some time,
    Behind all the lands and seas
    The final rest, peace
    The mining, the true


    But with moon or fire you realize
    That all that...
    all that been done before
    There so many gone from this door
    and returned no more
    To tell us about the shore,
    all that we can hear
    is the wave distant roar


    but still the reverie, the journey
    invitation you cannot ignore

    the boat must go...
    and returned never more

    Submitted on 2007-02-27 05:44:35     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      some grammer mistakes but really really really good imagery and symbolism. your poems are all so meaningful!
    | Posted on 2007-04-13 00:00:00 | by Keller | [ Reply to This ]
      that is a nice poem. i could picture iyt like a story.

    Some where some time
    Behind all the lands and seas
    The final rest ....peace
    The mining the clue the true

    a life story till death

    and because im dyiing for a voyage...


    | Posted on 2007-02-27 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]

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