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    dots Submission Name: Of Kings and Learned Mendots
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    Author: The Gadfly
    ASL Info:    52/M/Moreno Valley, CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 1048/1348/375
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       ABAAB format;eight syllables per line.

    Learned is two syllables in this poem "learn-ed"


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    dotsOf Kings and Learned Mendots
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    Each turn of the Old Testament,
    from Garden fall through lions' den,
    records great efforts God has spent
    to call His children to repent
    in spite of kings and learned men.

    God did not seek the proud and strong.
    He does not now, He did not then.
    For pride cannot admit one wrong;
    instead, it rushes in headlong
    pursuit of kings and learned men.

    So through the ages God has watched
    and pressed His Word through prophets' pen.
    Though blades and axes have been notched,
    Man's power-grab was clearly botched:
    firstfruits of kings and learned men.

    What science can't explain away,
    the press still buries on page ten.
    No black and white, just shades of gray,
    obscure the truth to "seize the day!"
    this curse of kings and learned men.

    Before the jury stands and sits,
    the Judge convenes the courtroom when
    His calendar and schedule fits.
    Whom God condemns, or Christ acquits
    unheard of kings and learned men.



    The Gadfly




    Submitted on 2007-02-27 06:00:11     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Great write. Though I am not a religious person, I found this poem to be quite entertaining, and amusing. Like Elissar said, you spelled science wrong, and that is the only thing that I noticed that was wrong with it.

    Good flow, and structure. The repitition of "kings and learned men" really helps out a lot. Sometimes people put repititions in poems, and they don't turn out so well. But, I think you did a great job with this one. Normally I would get into a whole religious debate with you, but I like your writing so much, that I don't think I will. Well, not really a debate, it just seems when I offer my view, people tend to get edgy.
    Which, doesn't say much for them.

    Anywho, good work on the poem. I througouhly enjoyed this peice, and I think I will add it to my favorites list. Bravo.

    Sincerely,
    Draigon
    | Posted on 2007-03-02 00:00:00 | by Draigon | [ Reply to This ]
      I am not sure if this poetry of a statement
    but it is however very very well written
    and was such a joy to read.

    I would to have a convo. sometime with you


    ~shawn
    | Posted on 2007-02-28 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, this is an awsome poem. I really enjoyed reading it. The onlny thing that I could possibly point out is that you spelt science wrong.

    Excellent job otherwise. :D
    | Posted on 2007-02-27 00:00:00 | by Elissar | [ Reply to This ]
      I would dearly love to comment on this as it is...astounding in the most pure form of the word, however I am but a peasant and therefore can only use simple words to please my simple mind. I enjoyed this, very much, the use of 'learn-ed' was beautiful.

    Thanks for a most enjoyable read.


    Leah
    | Posted on 2007-02-27 00:00:00 | by MornSweetSong | [ Reply to This ]


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