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    dots Submission Name: want "us" backdots

    Author: gloomyanddoomy
    ASL Info:    17,female
    Elite Ratio:    1.05 - 81/426/527
    Words: 92
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotswant "us" backdots

    Im tierd of crying
    tierd of trying
    when all I want is
    you to show me all
    guys arent the same
    over and over
    I tried
    over and over
    I lied
    over and over
    I cried
    and I still
    dont know what
    really happened
    but somewhere between
    our laugh
    our long talk
    our stupid little fights
    and all your jokes
    I fell in love
    and one day
    it all just fell apart
    and even
    though time
    has passed
    I will always
    want "us" back

    Deticated to: Hunter

    Submitted on 2007-02-27 06:41:29     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can relate to this poem. I have an exboyfriend that even though he hurt me really bad, I still love him with all my heart and if I could I would go through it all again if it ment having just one more day with him. Well other than many typos this poem is really well written. Keep up the good work. Peace.
    | Posted on 2007-04-06 00:00:00 | by RedneckPrincess | [ Reply to This ]
      I've read a lot of your poems and although they're all very good, and very well writen. I find you use a lot of lines like "I want to be a kid again because a skinned knee is easier to fix than a broken heart" Which are popular quotes. Lines like these kind of throw me off when I read your poems...it gives them a kind of fake feeling...I would love to hear a poem that is 100% yours

    Other than that it's awesome..and this is just my opinion..Keep Writin' Kapri
    | Posted on 2007-02-27 00:00:00 | by kapri49 | [ Reply to This ]

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