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    dots Submission Name: Alabaster Queendots
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    Author: sageeriol
    ASL Info:    23/male/GA.
    Elite Ratio:    3.19 - 314/322/106
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    dotsAlabaster Queendots
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    Her alabasterflesh stands out
    In this obsidian night
    Much like that of a goddess
    Fluttering around in your dreams as you close your eyes
    Azure skies can only envy my love
    As only the stars may touch near her beauty.
    Fields of crimson roses
    Reach for her beauty, and
    Much as I do they fall short
    Unworthy of such rewards.
    A great obscenity it would be
    To mar in any way her perfect figure.
    The greatest sin it would mean
    To scar her sweet innocence.
    My Angel
    My sweet, untouchable, Alabaster Queen.




    Submitted on 2007-02-27 10:32:02     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      goddammit you did it again.....you fell in love, but hell its a damn good piece and you proll deserve this one, keep it up [censored]
    | Posted on 2007-03-05 00:00:00 | by Master Bates | [ Reply to This ]
      This is very intense...very well written. You pour your heart out with such sweet words.


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    | Posted on 2007-02-28 00:00:00 | by Amanda Lynn | [ Reply to This ]


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