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desolation with a tad of hope
forced out in the cold again
lost in what we have known
circumstance arose from chance
and has driven us far beyond forever
The lurking vices linger on still
temptation hurdling through defenses
and the supposed, "good"
turns and walks away from the fight
fire sporadically flickers up and out
burns bright whenever the wind feels right
but loses it's incendiary luster
whenever the dust settles upon it
and the dust blinds and blankets the Earth
So it is with passion, it's seemingly lost
with the very Earth under cover
the soul seems to have all but burned out
and the cold retains it's territory...
Our houses inspire the heart and spirit
along the desolate dusty fields of old
the good has to remain solid and true
before all our homes are sold
before the inspiration leaves...
dig in and change...for the better.
Submitted on 2007-02-27 11:36:06
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I like this write!! I like when you say ''the dust blindes and blankets the earth.'' and how our houses inspire the hearts and spirit!! yeah... I like it!!!
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