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    dots Submission Name: Dust Bowldots
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    Author: austin
    ASL Info:    22/ Male/ Odessa, Texas
    Elite Ratio:    4.41 - 376/396/84
    Words: 172
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
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    Description:
       desolation with a tad of hope


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    dotsDust Bowldots
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    forced out in the cold again
    lost in what we have known
    circumstance arose from chance
    and has driven us far beyond forever

    The lurking vices linger on still
    temptation hurdling through defenses
    and the supposed, "good"
    turns and walks away from the fight

    fire sporadically flickers up and out
    burns bright whenever the wind feels right
    but loses it's incendiary luster
    whenever the dust settles upon it

    and the dust blinds and blankets the Earth
    So it is with passion, it's seemingly lost
    with the very Earth under cover
    the soul seems to have all but burned out

    and the cold retains it's territory...

    Our houses inspire the heart and spirit
    along the desolate dusty fields of old
    the good has to remain solid and true
    before all our homes are sold

    before the inspiration leaves...
    dig in and change...for the better.




    Submitted on 2007-02-27 11:36:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this write!! I like when you say ''the dust blindes and blankets the earth.'' and how our houses inspire the hearts and spirit!! yeah... I like it!!!

    *kate
    | Posted on 2007-02-27 00:00:00 | by koolness | [ Reply to This ]


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