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    dots Submission Name: To say you are sorrydots
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    Author: DaGrimReaperess
    Elite Ratio:    0.37 - 488/199/15
    Words: 25
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
    Total Views: 1083
    Average Vote:    2.5000
    Bytes: 196



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    dotsTo say you are sorrydots
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    Lets remorse
    write these words
    its not that hard to..
    say that you are sorry

    humans eer
    bursting sweet bubbles
    of imperfections...





    Submitted on 2007-02-27 12:37:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      First of all id like to say that i cant belive i havent commented on this yet!

    Second of all ok so i guess ill comment on it.

    I reall like how its short and cuts straight to the point, but not too blunt.

    Admitting that your wrong is hard to some people. its all to do with the ego man.

    Tell them to let their pride stand aside for a minute and say that they are sorry.

    Buster
    | Posted on 2009-05-11 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      hi thanx for the comment on after dark one day i will finish writing the story i am glad it took u someplace

    i like what u said in this poem some comments say its short but i think you said just enough and choose good word usage
    i think anybody understand
    to err is human

    great write an thanx

    sandman
    | Posted on 2009-01-22 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      An entire list of endless praise for a small handful of words? well thats helpful eh?

    I don't disagree with what you have said, but I also do not believe you said it all. this doesn't even seem like a complete thought, though what is here is well worded. My apologies if I sound like an [censored], but call me what you will.

    If you do happen to take my advice and write more to this, please be so kind as to let me know so I may read it

    ~Rob~
    | Posted on 2008-11-15 00:00:00 | by ThisIsReal | [ Reply to This ]
      kool
    | Posted on 2008-08-20 00:00:00 | by geekyslacker | [ Reply to This ]
      AWESOMELY STRONG
    | Posted on 2007-12-18 00:00:00 | by N0shin | [ Reply to This ]
      random
    | Posted on 2007-06-30 00:00:00 | by Vampiric Death | [ Reply to This ]
      wow i am so breathless after reading this!
    | Posted on 2007-05-27 00:00:00 | by Inside Joke | [ Reply to This ]
      omg this is absoulty perfect! it explains perfectly what its like to aplogize. amazing!
    write on,
    Lanna
    | Posted on 2007-05-19 00:00:00 | by EmeRalDEyeZ5491 | [ Reply to This ]
      I can so see you just free versing with some kick ass music in the back, completely doing your own thing. The fact that I'm listening to "horror" musci is probabily contributing to that, but none the less, your shyt's on the level and completely original(without losing the ADD audicence) nice!
    | Posted on 2007-04-30 00:00:00 | by dismentled | [ Reply to This ]
      this is the first poem i've read in awhile I like it not sure I understand it but I'm not sure I was ever to good at that anyway good job

    reedo
    | Posted on 2007-04-09 00:00:00 | by reedo | [ Reply to This ]
      overall. . . . . . . . . . I can honestly say that I loved this piece, GRIM.



    did you say you have clean paan?
    | Posted on 2007-03-13 00:00:00 | by SilentDreams42 | [ Reply to This ]
       hmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmmm . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . I love it even though I don't agree with it in all aspects. I believe in forgiveness, repentance, and mercy. I also believe that nobody is perfect, but sometimes saying sorry just isn't enough . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . . .
    | Posted on 2007-03-13 00:00:00 | by SilentDreams42 | [ Reply to This ]
      this is one of them smart poems that you only have to read once to understand i like its shortness it isnt a whole buncha nothing
    | Posted on 2007-03-13 00:00:00 | by urbanguttah | [ Reply to This ]
      You are a mystery. I love your misspellings. No lie.
    | Posted on 2007-03-06 00:00:00 | by GiveMeTheGun | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, somehow your last stanza is so mysterious and intriguing that I just love it. I'm not quite sure what "eer" means, (I looked it up, and it says that it can either be an adverb, or that it could mean "e'er" as in "ever"), but despite that, I still find it awesome.

    I like the explanation of "bubbles" because they really are like us...it's like we are floating around this huge world, just wandering....and we never know what direction the wind will take us (by influence)...and we also never know when our time is up, thus contrasting with the "burst" that you speak of...We are innocently born, yet we decide ultimately where to "float" you can say lol....I really liked it. I think this earned a favorite.

    Also, I think those 3 lines could be a poem in itself. It's awesome.
    | Posted on 2007-02-28 00:00:00 | by darkrose16 | [ Reply to This ]
      Work on caps and punctuation.
    It's really short, and blah.
    Make it longer and I believe
    it might come together alot better?
    | Posted on 2007-02-27 00:00:00 | by Dark Divinity | [ Reply to This ]
      humm....It's kinda short. I wanted it to keep going. know what i mean? it pretty good and all, i guess I just wanted more.

    *kate
    | Posted on 2007-02-27 00:00:00 | by koolness | [ Reply to This ]


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