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    dots Submission Name: Nonsensical to A Tdots

    Author: MornSweetSong
    ASL Info:    21/female/wales
    Elite Ratio:    4.42 - 110/83/46
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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       This is probably the naffest, cheesiest thing I have ever written...but it has to be sent, Im just venting some emotion in the only way I will ever know how. Verse...you know I love you

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    dotsNonsensical to A Tdots

    This is quite possibly the only poem I will ever write that doesn't have corny rhyme words.

    No matter how far I run, or how deep I hide.
    You track me down and find me
    Bringing with you, my tragic past life
    I dont want your misery, my old trouble and strife.

    I left it behind for a damned good reason,
    What part of 'Betrayed' just doesnt configure with you?
    Did I say, at ANY point, Please walk back into my life and bring my razor blades with you?
    No, I didnt. So take my pain, misery, guilt and blame and put it back where it belongs.
    In that place, at that time with you people.
    I dont belong to your era anymore.
    I left for a reason, freedom the morphine I sought.
    Now go, leave, and disturb my inner peace no more.

    Submitted on 2007-02-27 12:47:07     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this poem. I can feel how pissed off you are at whoever. I feel about the same way most of the time. I'm starting to feel it more often though. I like the last two lines, and how you said "freedom the morphine I sought", cuz morphine is awesome, and if freedom was a drug, it would be morphine. And "disturb my inner peace no more" is basically "[censored] you" in a more intelligent way. I don't think that anything that expresses true emotion is cheesy, unless someone tries too hard or something. You did really good at venting your anger into this poem.

    And weed for everyone!
    | Posted on 2007-02-27 00:00:00 | by Magic Dragon | [ Reply to This ]

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