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    dots Submission Name: Farewelldots
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    Author: darkness
    ASL Info:    19/F/my own world
    Elite Ratio:    1.84 - 524/218/40
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
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    dotsFarewelldots
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    O I have broken the trusted wheel of friendship
    O yes, Indeed its true

    See these relationships never seem to last
    either you or I must go

    I do appreciate what we had
    but we really should part

    This friendship thing is much to hard

    So I build my wall
    bid thee farewell
    and we part..




    Submitted on 2007-02-27 12:47:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      kool.
    | Posted on 2007-12-17 00:00:00 | by BusterLILblock | [ Reply to This ]
      wow this is really good different but i like it alot! <3 JustKillMe08
    | Posted on 2007-08-17 00:00:00 | by justkillme08 | [ Reply to This ]
      I think you've taken a very calm road towards parting a friendship. It's as though it was meant to be and there is great understanding as to why this friendship cannot work. Most people that i know, they either stop talk totally and view the person as an enemy or they fight till they can't fight no more and then part. But yours is totally different. It's as though it was coming all the time and there is no tension when the day comes that you say "okay well it's not working out".

    It was a short straight forward piece. One thing i would have loved to see a bit more is the detail. I'm wondering what you've done to break that friendship. It's still a bit unclear to me.

    But other than that, it was a nice read.

    Cheers,

    Irina
    | Posted on 2007-08-03 00:00:00 | by charmedidentity | [ Reply to This ]
      This is pretty okay, it's not your best though. Shut up. I still love you.
    | Posted on 2007-06-03 00:00:00 | by GiveMeTheGun | [ Reply to This ]
      I like it. I hate when friendships turn out that way though.
    | Posted on 2007-04-05 00:00:00 | by Katlord | [ Reply to This ]
      I was the first to comment! YAY!
    | Posted on 2007-03-14 00:00:00 | by SilentDreams42 | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this one man . . . . . . . . . . . . . sometimes it feel like certain friendships will never work out. I especially like the last part of this piece. It's very calm and serene yet it has so much emotion.

    Nicely done.

    > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > > >

    SD
    | Posted on 2007-03-14 00:00:00 | by SilentDreams42 | [ Reply to This ]


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