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    dots Submission Name: Foolishdots

    Author: lori_tab
    ASL Info:    27/f/alabama
    Elite Ratio:    4.33 - 1752/1517/481
    Words: 100
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    forever the light dims
    the sun sets in another corner of the world
    and this all alludes to you
    and to me
    and how we used to be we

    i fantasize a world thati couldkiss you again
    kiss so sweet, involved into every depthof you
    an entire ocean of misbehaving

    you make me feel rather free
    like lifting to the air a thousand times I could tell you that I still love you
    and give in to my decietfulheart
    like the pague that rids me of glory
    instills me with shame
    i think of you

    Submitted on 2007-02-27 14:44:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ummm this is like a naughty unknown secret, i like this, and as always anything you write, for some reason i like to get inside your head and see what you are think, it makes my thoughts easier to navigate, i have no idea if we share like ideas most of the time, but i sure love the way you think.
    Sorry didn't mean to ramble on.
    Well this is wonderful.
    Im going to make like Lennon and peace the [censored] out.
    | Posted on 2007-03-07 00:00:00 | by WonderfulComa | [ Reply to This ]
      "an entire ocean of misbehaving"

    I really like that line.

    Funny, this seems to have been posted the day after you saw Eric. Hmmm...I wonder.

    Anyhow, I like it. I think it's pretty.
    | Posted on 2007-03-04 00:00:00 | by Raivn | [ Reply to This ]
      you've become a really really really good writer, hehe. beautiful stuff here. beautiful. yeah, that's about it. peace and love :)
    | Posted on 2007-03-02 00:00:00 | by Solomon Disease | [ Reply to This ]
      Yes this is emotional and to me is full of lost.

    The only thing is that there are a few typos
    clean it up a bit and you shall have something here

    btw how have ya been?

    | Posted on 2007-02-28 00:00:00 | by armand | [ Reply to This ]
      this was very emotional and well spoken ive alwaz liked your posts
    hope all is well

    thanx sandman
    | Posted on 2007-02-28 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      I like the imagery and the emotion in this piece. I think everyone has felt that way at least once in their life.
    | Posted on 2007-02-27 00:00:00 | by demonickitten87 | [ Reply to This ]

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