Night on the beach -------------------------------------------
As kisses evolves to flesh molding laying your back against the sand on the ocean’s shore
As the sand moves into the position we lay and explore
As our tongues become untwined and your neck I taste
Moving your legs apart with my hips and hands the case
Pushing them too there farthest point, as it takes notice in the sand
As your face ready`s for my entry as inside you I now land
As I slide in and out of pleasures door exploring your in’s and outs
Like a little child exploring new places of foreign land the route
You, wet as the oceans bank as grinds and strokes intensify
Covering ever thought or fantasy as my manhood in your body thrives
As I hit your inner g spot time and time again leaving your heartbeat running wild
As your moans let me know I’m doing everything right with my stroke, kiss and style
Making your toes curl as I drive your pleasure glands wild
As orgasm trinkle down like a wolf you howl
Like water falls from inside you orgasm continue to travel down
As our love making becomes one with the oceans sound
As we continue in our passion filled night on the sandy ground
Feeling like a roller coaster ride with peaks up and down
As I flip you over ,back arch and inside you again I stand
Knowing every move you want me to make because I’m your man
This night almost ready to end so like a wave you ride it out
Forever remembering this night on the beach
As the climatic ending too this evening is reach
Wow this was hella sexy...I did find small errors..like spelling errors:
too=to
etc...
"For being outside you too in you I now land"
I know what you mean, but that doesn't make sense..I suggest you fix that line
"As I’ll love making becomes one with the oceans sound"
I'm not sure what that meant..you should fix that..I'm guessing you mean..our love becomes one somethin like that?
"As I flip you over back arch as inside you again I stand"
this line should be fixed to:
"As I flip you over your back, you arch while inside you I compile"
i think that sounds better..
man you got some fine lines here..
"Covering ever thought or fantasy as my manhood in your body thrives"
that would be my favorite part
I don't know actually, because all of it is my favorite..overall excellent..very erotic, I'm lovin it..with a little ghetto style..
Don't forget to go over it, correct the small errors..I'm thinkin of adding it to my favorites..
Submission Name: Night on the beach
