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    dots Submission Name: LOOKING AND FINDING LOVEdots
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    Author: Bones
    ASL Info:    40/M/ALABAMA
    Elite Ratio:    2.75 - 11/10/18
    Words: 496
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Serious
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       THIS ALSO WAS INSPIRED BY FRIEDS AND MY OWN LIFE


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    dotsLOOKING AND FINDING LOVEdots
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    LOOKING AND FINDING LOVE
    Current mood: moody
    Category: Romance and Relationships

    WE SOMETIME GO THROUGH LIFE NEVER FINDING THE LOVE THAT WE SEE OTHER PEOPLE HAVE, SOMETIME WE FIND WHAT WE THINK IS LOVE JUST TO HAVE IT TAKEN AWAY IN THE BLINK OF AN EYE; SOME OF USE NEVER REALY KNEW WHAT IT`S LIKE TO HAVE A BLOOD MOTHER THAT REALY LOVES YOU & CARES FOR YOU, THOSE THAT DON`T SOMETIMES GET LUCKY TO END UP WITH A STEP MOM, FALSTER OE ADOPED MOM TO SHOW YOU THE LOVE OF A TRUE MOTHER; SOME PEOPLE THINK THEY ARE IN BAD SHAPE BECOUSE THEIR PARENTS ARE DIVORCE, SOME TIMES IT IS BEST FOR YOU & YOUR FAMILY; SOME OF US LOOK FOR LOVE IN ALL THE WRONG PLACES, WE GET HURT IN MORE WAYS THAN WE SHOULD; WE FALL IN LOVE WITH THE FIRST ONE THAT COMES ALONG,

    HOW GUYS TREAT GIRLS

    AT FIRST THEY TREAT YOU GOOD & AFTER THEY KNOW YOU HAVE GIVEN OUR HEART TO THEM THEY START TO CHANGE; THEY TELL YOU WHERE YOU CAN GO AND WHO YOU CAN HANG WITH, WHO TO TALK TO & WHO YOU CAN`T TALK TO; YOU TEND TO FALL FOR THEIR EVERY TRICK, THEY START TELLING YOU THAT NO OTHER GUY WOULD WANT TO HAVE ANYTHING TO DO WITH YOU; AFTER SOMETIME YOU START TO BELIVE WHAT HE SAID IS TRUE, YOU FEEL LIKE YOUR LIFE IS WORTHLESS WITH OUT HIM NO MATTER HOW BAD HE TREATS YOU AND MAKES YOU FEEL; DURING THIS TIME YOU START TO LOSE YOUR FRIENDS, AFTER AWHILE THE ONLY FRIENDS YOU HAVE ARE THE ONES HE WANTS YOU TO HAVE AND THAT IS ONLY LESS THAN 5; YOUNG LADIES & OLDER ALIKE THIS MUST STOP YOU HAVE TO DO SOMETING TODAY.

    THE WAY GIRLS TREAT GUYS

    MOST GUYS ARE GREATLY REJECTED IN SCHOOL, SOME GIRLS ARE ALWAYS PUTTING GUYS DOWN BECOUSE OF THE CLOTHES THEY WEAR; THEY SAY THEY ARE NOT AS GOOD LOOKING AS THE JOCKS AND THE MOST POPULAR GUYS, THEY DON`T LOOK FOR THE PERSONALITY OF A GUY JUST THE LOOKS 85% THE TIME; MOST GIRLS DON`T EVEN GIVE A GUY A CHANCE TO FIND OUT WHAT HE IS LIKE, WHAT KIND OF PERSON HE IS, THEY JUST GO BY THE LOOKS; AFTER THAT THE LADIES JUDGE MOST GUYS NOT ONLY BY THE LOOKS BUT BY THE MONEY HE HAS OR WHAT HE CAN BUY THEM, 85% WHAT THEY DON`T NEED.

    SO IN THESE CASES SOME OF US NEVER FIND THE LOVE THAT IS RIGHT FOR US, SOME NEVER FIND LOVE AT ALL AND WE END UP DIEING WITH AN EMPTY HEART; TELL SOMEONE HOW YOU FEEL, LET THEM KNOW YOU CARE ABOUT THEM, LET THEM KNOW THEY ARE SPECIAL TO YOU IN ANY WAY YOU CAN, EVERYONE NEEDS LOVE OR THEY WILL DIE NOT KNOWING TRUE LOVE.

    written by: WILLIAM DANIEL THOMPSON JR




    Submitted on 2007-02-27 15:36:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Um...a few typos here and there, you really dont need it all in caps, it sorta takes away from the idea and is a bit distracting...but yea, inspirational? Well its just the thoughts on your mind but really not everyone is like that and the girls who say all that stuff, like the shallow things, thats definatly not everyone and same with most of the guys I know as well...Seems like more of a rant because you watched so many people get hurt but yea, not everything is like that. But yeah, good I guess, not much mroe to say.
    -flora
    | Posted on 2007-02-28 00:00:00 | by blankscreen | [ Reply to This ]


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