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    dots Submission Name: Unawaredots
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    Author: SilentDreams42
    Elite Ratio:    6.43 - 38/30/42
    Words: 131
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    Description:
       It's hard when people go from loving you to acting as if you don't matter.....

    especially if you're close to them


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    dotsUnawaredots
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    unaware
    you didn't even bother
    to mention the separation
    to mention the divorce

    unaware
    you didn't even bother
    to tell me it was the end
    you didn't even bother
    to tell me that there was no chance

    it seems
    like there was only one moment
    you showed me that you cared
    you consoled me
    but that chapter is over

    you are now unaware
    you don't seem to care anymore
    you don't seem to show your love

    I lay down
    and try to shut my eyes
    try to shut out my pain
    try to forget
    but it's not the same
    it's so hard without you
    but you are so unaware

    unaware
    you don't care
    you don't hurt
    you don't feel
    you don't love




    Submitted on 2007-02-27 18:14:25     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      this is raw cool. good write.

    DUDE tell me.


    laterrrrrrrrrrr

    Aylin
    | Posted on 2007-02-27 00:00:00 | by WD-40 | [ Reply to This ]


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