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    dots Submission Name: Dumb dogdots
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    Author: Clarkie
    ASL Info:    18/F/FL
    Elite Ratio:    5.33 - 101/76/36
    Words: 49
    Class/Type: Poetry/Friendship
    Total Views: 807
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 329



    Description:
       Just something that popped into my figners and got typed.


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    dotsDumb dogdots
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    I would I were as true a friend
    as your best
    tongue lolling
    galloping, gangling
    loving every moment
    of your presence
    never tired of listening
    or fetching
    but I am worn down
    deaf, as dumb as a dog
    without the kisses
    or the all suffering temper




    Submitted on 2007-02-27 22:54:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hi,

    Small change:

    I would I were as true a friend
    to:
    I wish I were as true a friend

    deaf, as dumb as a dog
    to:
    deaf, as a dumb K9

    This reminded me of the pup at home, no matter how bad the day was, she would always be happy to see you no matter what.

    Great Write,

    Kind regards
    Eric
    | Posted on 2007-02-28 00:00:00 | by bornx2000 | [ Reply to This ]


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